Thursday, February 09, 2006

My Deepest Love excerpt

Here's a quick excerpt of the new mss that I'm working on. Please over look the typos. It's a very rough draft.

Chapter One

Traci Wells stared at the cell phone in her hand in disbelief. “I can’t believe she cancelled on me again.” She huffed shoving the phone back in the gym bag. “She knows we work out together three times a week. How could Cherise schedule another meeting?”
Getting out of the car she slammed the door and stormed into the local fitness club. She stopped at the desk signed in on the clipboard and then headed to the workout room. Pausing in the doorway, Traci watched the other members of all shapes and sizes sweating to the beat of their individual music. At her left a family was using the bikes as part of their cardio working out. A young woman in her twenties walked in front of them heading to her step class at the end of the hall. She noticed a couple of body builders using the weights through the glass window behind the bikes. Why would they want to have that much muscle on their bodies?
Sighing she made her way over to the mats, so she could stretch before the aerobics class. If she didn’t love potato chips the gym wouldn’t ever be a part of her life. But she needed a way to work off her favorite snack, so here she was. Her best friend suggested the low fat kind, but what’s the thrill of eating a plain chip? If she was going to cheat she would do it the right way. Tossing the bag to the side Traci fell to the mat already hating the night ahead.
After class tonight, she would have over to her sister’s work and give her the riot act. Cherise always found a way to back out the last minute when it came to going her with her. It was supposed to be a sisterly work out plan, but her big sister wasn’t keeping up her part of the deal.
Sure, she knew that Cherise stayed busy with the antique shop, but she needed more than that in her life. How did ever except to find that man she was always talking about if she stayed hid away in that shop?
Pushing her sister to the back of her mind, Traci folded one of her legs in front of her and reached over to touch her opposite toe. She loved stretching before her work out. It made the routine so much easier to follow. The step class she signed up for was really fast paced and it could break a weaker person in the same day. She had been in this class almost two months now and she loved it.
Moving her legs around, she reached for the other leg and felt the pull of her muscles getting ready for another nice of fun. She didn’t know if she really like working out as much as she enjoyed staring at all the gorgeous guys that came here. This was the hot spot for the best looking guys in town. Taking a quick glance around the crowded room, she noticed the guy she really looked it wasn’t here tonight.
She had never been into picking up guys at the club or the gym, but after taking a glance at him in those tight black gym shorts, she changed her mind quickly. But she didn’t have enough nerve to approach him, so she just stared at him from afar. Anyway, Cherise would have a fit she knew she even looked at the guy in the first place.
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Zack Drace was coming from his nightly kickboxing class when he noticed the woman again over on the mats stretching her sexy body. He knew he needed to head home, but he couldn’t resist taking a peek at her. Tonight the shoulder length brownish black hair was pulled into a tight bun shoving off her tempting neck. A white sports bra and matching short highlighted her chocolate brown skin. It showed off all her delicious curves. Walking over to an empty table, he found a seat where he could watch her without being detected. His interest in this one particular woman shocked him because out of all his brothers he favored red heads. Glancing at his watch Zack noticed his class had ended early, which meant he had at least ten extra minutes to watch her.
Leaning back in the chair, he pulled his water from his gym bag and took a quick drink. He always carried extra water with him because his kickboxing class always too a little extra out of him. He loved coming to the gym to work out and when his younger brother Richard had the chance he would come with him. Screwing the top back on his water, he sat it on the table and watched the object of his interest finish her stretching, then stand her. It didn’t go over his head that he wasn’t the only man checking out her sexy body and for some reason that bothered him. However, she seemed totally oblivious to him and the other men running their eyes up and down her body. She adjusted her sports bra and picked up her sky blue gym bag off the floor and turned in his direction.
Zack rested his back against the seat and tried to think of a way to get her into a conversation. He didn’t even know if she would be interested in dating a white man, but he could at least test the waters with a quick hello. He saw that she was getting closer to him, so he coughed to clear his throat. He didn’t want his voice catching when he was trying to impress her.
“Hi” He said the second she was within hearing range.
She paused in mid-step and started down at him. Her whiskey brown eyes blinked, then a smile spread across her full mouth. “Hi.” She whispered back and then she continued to the step class behind him.
Turning around in the seat, he noticed how the short hugged her well-defined bottom. Yes, there were some definite possibilities there if he could go by the look her saw in her eyes. The alarm went off on his watch and he cursed under his breath, Lee was going to kill him. This was the second time this month was he would be late for the Drace brother’s Wednesday night dinner.
Zack got up from the car and snatched his gym bag off the floor. Oh well, he didn’t care because he finally got to speak to the goddess in the white workout outfit. He hoped that she would be back tomorrow. Maybe then, he could introduce himself and see where things went from there. Whistling he strolled toward the front doors and went out with thoughts of her in his mind.


Rachel Cade said...

sd u know how much i liked this story
cant wait to see how zack wins traci's heart
also looking for clinton and jenisha

Writerdiva said...

Thanks! I'm working on Clinton and Jenisha right now. I should have some new stuff by the end of next week.

Ms HerMajesty said...

Hi Rochelle,

I like the excerpt.

Most relationships start with just one simple word "hi".

Looking forward to more.

Writerdiva said...

Thanks, Ms. Hermajesty,

I'm planning to write a story for each of the Drace brothers. Zack spoke to me first, but I hadn't decided who'll be next.